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signs, poems and so on by Misse-Chan87


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I will lie
Even as you look me in the eye
And everyday
I will say
"I'm fine"
And take these feelings of mine
And bury them so deep inside
No one will know where they hide.
this, to me at least, seems like it could be the chorus of a song or something. If you want to add more, you're more than welcome. just give me credit and send me the finished piece.
so yeah ^.^ not much to say.
Kay thanks <3
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HeroxSTFU Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The rhyming is amazing (Y) Respect (Y)
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BethanyyJoelle Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011  Student Writer
haha thank you :]
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HeroxSTFU Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Urw ;)
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KowareYume Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The rhyming scheme is PERFECT. :3
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BethanyyJoelle Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2011  Student Writer
thanks :]
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KowareYume Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are very welcome. :)
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SunnySometimes Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2011
Short, but I love it. If I'm ever in a poetic mood I'll definately try building on it :)
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BethanyyJoelle Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2011  Student Writer
thanks :] and you should, i think poetry is beautiful and would definitely read it :]
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SunnySometimes Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011
I added onto it. Hope you like it :D [link]
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BethanyyJoelle Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2011  Student Writer
yeah i do like it :] good job! it has nice flow and emotion and the message is clearly spoken
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